Purpose and contribution (for comment)

I think I tried to include the entire PhD in this paper. The aim is to present a synthesis of the ideas considered for each design issue discussed in the paper. These ideas are presented as the key concepts for incorporation into the methodology. How about a purpose that focuses on the key concepts?

This paper presents and justifies ten key concepts to be incorporated into a methodological procedure that incorporates general guidance on conceptual modelling and embeds the utility of the domain-specific knowledge offered in the SCOR model.  An outline of a seven phase procedure for SCM applications is outlined and the implications to develop the steps that will aid a user in creating a domain-specific conceptual model are proposed. [MW1]  

NOT: Here is a procedure which has not been validated = development cases required

Should the paper title be:

“Conceptual modelling for SCM Applications: Key concepts and requirements”

NOT: A Procedure …. As this implies that is fully formed and has been validated with applications. We are presenting here the outline design work.

Not there yet but is the contribution more about the synthesis of the ideas for the ten key concepts:

Ten key concepts synthesised from a set of ideas that were identified for each design issue that addresses the requirements for conceptual modelling of SCM applications.

Please revise / let me know your thoughts.

I will be back from Cambridge around 2PM if you have time to go through these things.

BTW, just making some very minor changes as helped me get my head around making the paper clearer. We can do this, but we must avoid “where are the case applications” argument as this would create a dead end for this contribution.

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 The purpose of this paper is to synthesis the guidance available in the simulation literature with the utility of a domain specific process reference model in the form SCOR to be incorporated into a set of key concepts so to deduce a new set of phases

The purpose of this paper is to identify a set of phases to be included in a comprehensive procedure that embeds the utility of a process reference model in the form of SCOR that incorporates

The purposes of the paper is to propose a framework for a simulation CM procedure that

This paper presents ten key concepts to incorporate into a domain specific conceptual modelling procedure that incorporates existing guidance and embeds the utility of SCOR.  An outline of a seven phase procedure is outlined and implications for further res

and refine the steps and associated

of a comprehensive approach

Implications  and proposes implications for the development of methods and tools to incorporate in a comprehensive methodology that can be used